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Title: Critique of Mark Lynas’ “Global Warming: Is It Already Too Late”
[[[[Inro---%26gt;]]]] Just how serious is global warming? Should anything be done about it, and most importantly, [italic]can[/italics] anything be done about it? Global warming is described as Earth’s average increase in temperature due to greenhouse gasses, such as carbon dioxide trapping heat and energy in the Earth’s atmosphere, also known as the greenhouse effect. An increase in temperature may cause a change in climate and precipitation patterns. An increase in temperature may also result in ice caps melting: which is a cause of great concern, due to its potential threat to civilization. It has been discussed that our planet is getting warmer, yet carbon dioxide has always existed through volcanic emission. Is man to blame, or is global warming an inevitable phenomenon? Climatologist and social activist, Mark Lynas, gives incite on how serious global warning is, and answers whether it is too late to do something about it. Mark Lynas has written many articles for publications, including [italics]the Observer and the Guardian[/italics], and is the author of the book [italics]High Tide: News from a Warming World[/italics] written in 2004. In Lynas’ essay, “Global Warming: Is It Already Too Late?” (Pearson Prentice-Hall, 2008); Lynas raises social awareness on the situation.
[[[[summary1--%26gt;]]]]Lyna's essay was an interesting look into the seriousness of global warming. Introducing the essay, the author states that global warming has happened before. Describing it as a world wide mass extinction that happened 251 million years ago due to volcanic emissions, he references the end-Permian apocalypse (Lynas 564). Lynas insists that man is now the cause of global warming stating, "The world stands on the brink of a similar cataclysm, with one crucial difference. The agent of death at the end of the Permian period was volcanism. Now the agent of death is man." (Lynas 564) Additionally, the author answers how close we are to the catastrophe and whether it is still avoidable or not. The air we breathe today is chemically different than the air breathed during the pre-industrial era and even the evolutionary historic periods of man-kind. Referring to the UN Intergovernmental Panel on Climate Change, the author claims temperatures could be as much as 6 degrees Celsius higher by the end of the century if the current rate of carbon accumulation continues (Lynas 565). Lynas claims temperatures will continue to rise and assumes that there is hope if man takes action within a couple of decades. However, referring to a doubled rate of carbon-dioxide accumulation in the last two years recorded from US atmospheric sampling stations, the author mentions a growing number of scientist fear it may already be too late.
[[[[[summary2--%26gt;]]]]Sequentially, the author brings up a greater concern and warns: because methane, another greenhouse gas sealed deep under oceanic continental shelves, is 21 times more potent than carbon-dioxide, if even a small quantity escape into the atmosphere global warming might become inevitable. The author explains because of low temperatures and pressure, methane is currently in a solid state and further illustrates: by ocean temperatures warming, methane will escape to the surface causing a greater impact on global warming. Geologists suggest this mechanism may be what drove the end-Permian cataclysm, “carbon dioxide from volcanoes first raised world temperatures enough to destabilize methane hydrates, after which prehistoric global warming gained its own deadly momentum” (Lynas 566). Lynas points that scientists are unanimous on man made-global warming and fear it may already be out of control. The author explains “[i]f gas is released, entire continental slopes could collapse in enormous submarine landslides, triggering tsunami waves of up to 15 meters in height—enough to level entire coastal cities” (Lynas 567). The author makes note of the many danger signs of global warming noting 2003 as the second-warmest year on record. The author also mentions last summer’s heat wave across Europe, rising sea-levels, and most baffling, hurricanes forming south of the equator, “[h]urricanes were thought to be an entirely north Atlantic phenomenon” (Lynas 567).Proofreading critique essay?
ok, very good overall, but you're college level, so let's be picky.
I'd say "and most importantly", not more, since there are only two choices, should and can.
"is described" in the paper? Then say so. Or is this ("Earth’s average increase in temperature...etc") your description?
I'd like "atmosphere, also known as..." to be "atmosphere, which is also known as", just to be clear.
In the intro, you suggest that an increase in temp does certain things. Is this suggested by the original paper, or is this supposed to be general knowledge? You suggest that "it has been discussed that our planet is getting warmer" , again is this you or the other author? Perhaps, "The author suggests...", "The author says..."
The author likely does not give "incite" (as in "incite to riot"), but does "give insight".
In the summary, "Lyna's essay is an interesting look", not "was", unless the essay is deceased.
You might explain what an "end-Permian apocalypse" is, since you aren't writing to an audience of geologists, although the quote makes it fairly clear.
Again, I'd like to be sure if it's you or he: "The air we breathe today is chemically different ...etc."
The "US" should be spelled out.
Oops! A biggie--a "growing number of scientist"? Scientists.
"quantity escape..."...qualtity escapes? plural?
"man made-global ...etc." probably you mean "man-made"..."
Finally, your summaries. What are you critiquing ? His writing, his conclusions, what? The only summation I can find is one word...you allow that this is "interesting". Was it a good read? An easy read? Would it appeal to a general audience? Was it a tome? Too simple? Too technical? Too long? Too short? A critique, I think, is your time to offer your opinion, at least in the summary.
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